Re: Isla Muetre

**thegrimmshow** · **thegrimmshow** on Thu Apr 02, 2009 9:30 am

DRAMA and ACTION. very good bed fellows. Very Happy

**Gopher** · **Gopher** on Wed Apr 08, 2009 3:18 pm

thegrimmshow wrote:DRAMA and ACTION. very good bed fellows.

It has very short chapters.... I dunno, but don't you get sorta tired of JP fan stories? (no offense) The whole "dinos on an island" and "snakes on a plane" or whatever is already created. Nice story, but I wonder when we'll see something original. I made a story about 24 pages about some stuff....

Some stuff that I do not want anybody to copy...

**godzillaman** · **godzillaman** on Wed Apr 08, 2009 7:02 pm

It's okay... the sentence fluency could be better tho. Too choppy. What I mean is, it's like: this is this. That is that. I think it would be better if it was: This is this, although that was that. Other than that, it's pretty good.

**Gopher** · **Gopher** on Wed Apr 08, 2009 7:06 pm

It's sort of confusing, however.

**godzillaman** · **godzillaman** on Wed Apr 08, 2009 7:07 pm

And there are, like, 2 sentences per chapter.

JPOG Nerd 01 · JPOG Nerd 01 on Thu Apr 09, 2009 12:10 am

godzillaman wrote:It's okay... the sentence fluency could be better tho. Too choppy. What I mean is, it's like: this is this. That is that. I think it would be better if it was: This is this, although that was that. Other than that, it's pretty good.

Thanks. I will give you karma

**Gopher** · **Gopher** on Thu Apr 09, 2009 4:17 pm

JPOG Nerd 01 wrote:
godzillaman wrote:It's okay... the sentence fluency could be better tho. Too choppy. What I mean is, it's like: this is this. That is that. I think it would be better if it was: This is this, although that was that. Other than that, it's pretty good.

Thanks. I will give you karma/Reps/Points

...Was that a compliment...?

**thegrimmshow** · **thegrimmshow** on Mon Apr 13, 2009 7:51 am

Some stuff

can you share it to us gopher? Very Happy

Spartan 117 · Spartan 117 on Sat Apr 18, 2009 8:02 pm

Cool story Joel. Very Happy

**Gopher** · **Gopher** on Mon Apr 20, 2009 6:31 pm

thegrimmshow wrote:
Some stuff

can you share it to us gopher?

A little too confidential, sorry...

Spartan 117 · Spartan 117 on Tue Apr 21, 2009 5:14 pm

I like this story.... Very Happy

Raptor X · Raptor X on Sat Apr 25, 2009 4:25 pm

Spartan 117 · Spartan 117 on Sat Apr 25, 2009 5:33 pm

Its a good story Very Happy

**thegrimmshow** · **thegrimmshow** on Thu May 14, 2009 5:04 am

Gopher wrote:
thegrimmshow wrote:
Some stuff

can you share it to us gopher?

A little too confidential, sorry...

oh. ok. heheh. Very Happy

Spartan 117 · Spartan 117 on Sat Jun 06, 2009 7:16 pm

Thats good joel!